Surface Features!

 Kia ora readers, 

This week our class is learning about surface features! Surface features are the rules of writing that we use to make words and sentences. We had to do this because it will be easier for other people to read. It makes sense but all it needs is: Punctuation, capitals and spaces. Here is an example: thissentsaChulymakessen Zbuttisrellyhrd to reed. This sentence makes sense but it doesn't have surface features.

On our Room 9 writing site our teacher put a link to a story we needed to fix. We made our own copy. We had to read it once and find the end of the sentences. We also had to change the repeated words. We could change the boy names into something different. Rinaz and Sean were the narrators, while Xavier was acting the bad man. 

This is what writing we had to fix! 

He kept absolutely still as the footsteps got louder he tried not to suffocate as he laid under the bed he was wondering what had happened to his brother and his family. The man with the knife in his hand stormed around the house. Mums had boyfriends before but we had not thought that they would ever find us maybe he was one of them looking for revenge but why would he come. mum would just move and how did he find us we live on the other side of the planet from where all of mums boyfriends were so how could he find us he might have put a tracker on mum when he last saw her or on one of the devises ‘Hello where are you I know your here you're going to tell me where you're mother is or you shall join your father... in the skies so which will it be death or freedom you have 10 seconds chose wisely’.

This is what I changed!

Bokuto kept absolutely still as the footsteps got louder. He tried not to suffocate as he laid under the bed. The boy was wondering what had happened to his brother and his family. The man with the knife in his hand stormed around the house.
 Mum has had boyfriends before but we had not thought that they would ever find us. Maybe he was one of them looking for revenge, but why would he come? Mum would just move. So how did he find us? We live on the other side of the planet from where all of mum's boyfriend were. So how could he find us? This ex might have put a tracker on mum. when he last saw her or on one of her devices.
“Hello, where are you? I know you're here. You're going to tell me where your mother is or you shall join your father… In the skies so which will it be, death or freedom! You have ten seconds to choose wisely.” 

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Descriptive Writing Story! :D

 Kia ora readers, 

Today I will be sharing my descriptive writing! This week's writing we have to make a story about a picture each day. We also have to write in the present tense. We had to put in as many language features as possible. 

Here is my slide show of writing! :)  

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Word of The Week: Glamorous! :O

 Kia ora readers, 

Welcome back to my blog! Today i'll be doing a new word of the week! Today's word is glamorous! The definition for glamorous means beauty and excitement! 

Here is my word of the week! :) 

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My Writing Story! :D

Kia ora readers! How are you all doing today?

This week our class made a new writing story for Term 4! My story is actually kinda different to everyone's blog... I made it about if I was in yandere simulator! 

It's about a japanese horror game and your this girl on a crush with this boy called Taro Yamada but there's other rivals who also have a crush on him so you basically have to kill them so they don't confess their love at the cherry blossom tree on friday! You think it's not scary but you can kill them different ways like stabbing or drowning!

Here some of my story! :O (Haven't finished)

Chapter 3: WHAT THE H-

“SCREECH!” I went frozen.. The rumor was true! SHE DID KILL PEOPLE! Ayano pushed one of the students on the roof! Oh no.. She spotted me and sprinted down stairs to go and tell the teachers! All of the teachers went missing! I panicked.. But wait I just thought of a great idea I could do the next day ;) 

Chapter 4: Heartbroken..

Tuesday morning half of the class were violently killed by Ayano. She did many different kills like drown, betray, push off rooftop, but mostly stabbing. Yesterday I learned some new info about her… She had a HUGE crush on the boy from class 3 - 2. I heard she kills some people around 12:30 at the rooftop so I'm going to ask Taro (Ayano’s crush) to come with me at 12 : 25.. Then she will never have her crush…

Chapter 5: Heartbroken pt 2. 

“Hey you're the boy from class 3-2 right?” I said. “ Uh yea what did you want to talk about?” Replied Taro. “ could you come with me I wanted to show you an update that happened to the rooftop!” I said excitedly! “Sure” Taro said unsurprisingly. “That would be great!” I shouted! I walked Taro to the rooftop and… (STAB) Taro was shocked! “What did you do! Don’t ever come near me!” Taro screamed! “n-no w-wait.” Ayano fell to the ground! Taro called the police to say that there was a death at academy high! I acted like I never knew that would happen…

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Word of The Week: Luxurious 💸

 Kia ora readers, 

Yay it's finally term 4 now! Hopefully everyone is ready for term 4! Today's word of the week is a bit different! Because we got to choose our word! Anyways today's word is luxurious! The definition for luxurious means it's high quality or expensive taste. 

Here is my new word of the week! :D

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