I am a Year 7 student in the Uru Mānuka Cluster. This is a place where I will share my learning. Please note that some of it will not be complete, it will be my first drafts. Remember to be positive, thoughtful and helpful when you leave me a comment.
Your sentence about the monster's tongue being smooth and squishy made me smile and shiver. It does look strangely smooth and squishy! Your rewritten sentences also stands out as being descriptive, powerful and engaging. Next step: Complete the sentences about your monsters body and personality by saying who in your sentence. 'Blue fluffy fur with tiny arms and feet' changes to 'He has blue fluffy fur with tiny arms and feet.'
To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows: 1. Something positive - something you like about what I have shared. 2. Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what I had to say 3. Something helpful - how have you connected with my learning? Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.
Your sentence about the monster's tongue being smooth and squishy made me smile and shiver. It does look strangely smooth and squishy! Your rewritten sentences also stands out as being descriptive, powerful and engaging.
ReplyDeleteNext step: Complete the sentences about your monsters body and personality by saying who in your sentence.
'Blue fluffy fur with tiny arms and feet' changes to 'He has blue fluffy fur with tiny arms and feet.'
Thank you Miss D for commenting on my post. I could change to "Blue fluffy" "he has blue fluffy". Thank you for telling me:)
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